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I Love You (Free verse) by Blindpoetry

Loving you is the best thing I can do, Seeing your face makes me want to do, That long kiss - I should do, Just because I love you too. And I count the days, Wondering when I'll see that lovely face, Hoping you feel the same way. And if that's the case, I'll love you forever. - Spence

richa 19-Dec-03/8:39 AM
All the do and too rhymes are pointless.

try - seeing your face/makes me want/that long kiss - for the first four lines (kiss even half-rhymes with face).




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