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No delusions. (Free verse) by darby pyn

sweat sugar and let me taste your pores. get drunk and smoke be my favorite mistake. be a photograph disguised as a bookmark. be a question I never answer. we never lied after sex connected in the shower with the radio screaming , sharing a cigarette on the balcony starring at nothing in silence. talk is cheap. we were all about action, and satisfaction. no regrets. in social circles we hid like thieves. stealing are moments behind the trees. in a forest of rumors we heard them all then watched them fade like leaves in fall.. under the radar below the chin when he was gone I came right in. I felt cold that I didn’t care. karma is eternal. just a heartache away. in his bed, inside his wife. I can feel his steel, his stare a knife. but he never knew your secret life. I am the other man. a whisper a glance. you like the excitement too much to advance. it will never last. I knew it all along. no delusions, no regrets. no feelings. no respect.

Shuushin 6-Dec-03/5:50 AM
Interesting format, and I like the words/mood. I think it wants to be more though. Longer - stick a vaccuum pump on it.




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