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I Hate You (Free verse) by mytenderrage

I despise you. You took my heart, And ripped it in to shreds. Until there was nothing left. I detest you. You stabbed my chest Until my blood flowed out Into a puddle of crimson Beneath my aching figure. Until there was a hole Of emptiness within My abused body, Helpless and hopeless, Cold and dead. You had offered me warmth, But I was so na??ve. I believed you. I wanted you. I did not anticipate All this pain All this hurt. You went away With hardly a farewell. How dare you go And leave me all alone? I am so lonely, I need someone. I hate you, I hate you. You hurt me the most When you didn???t mean to. I hate you, I hate you. You left my life forever, With barely a farewell. I hate you, I hate you. I hate you because I love you.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 5-Aug-02/7:58 PM
It's really "sad" the way so many people on this site resort to saying "-=Dark_Angel=-'s poetry is crap, therefore his criticisms stem solely from jealousy of your wonderful talent." Can't you see I'm NOT TRYING TO WRITE THE SAME SORT OF POETRY AS RAVEN18? Why would I be jealous of someone who didn't have anything I wanted? I criticise raven18's poetry because it's trying to be meaningful (or whatever), and it fails. Miserably. You may criticise my poetry, but you don't mention in what respect it is lacking. You just vaguely insinuate that it's substandard, in a smug, knowing sort of way. Which is what I would expect from most people, since the default reaction on reading a poeme about something that is "childish" or "insensitive" or "crude" is to tell themselves that it's awful, because their brains would explode if they abandoned for one moment their constant desperate attitude of trying to have the same opinions as everyone else. What standards, exactly, does -=Dark_Angel=-'s poetry not meet? (And don't say something obvious and crap like "maturity, for one. Sensitivity, for another". Those are bullshit standards.)




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