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Forbidden Love (Free verse) by DolphnLvr82

Something that should feel so wrong, To me could never feel more right. The time goes by like it doesn't exist. The world is shut out; it's just me and him. Our lips softly touch, his hands run through my hair. Our bodies become one. His hands are soft and sincere. His words are real. Everything out in the open; there's nothing to hide. Our every fantasy now becomes reality. My body trembles as thoughts race through my head- All fears are soon forgotten, As our eyes close and our lips meet again.

Agemo-Z 5-Aug-02/11:17 AM
I don't think the issue is necessarily whether or not people would care about "who she screwed", but rather whether or not it was a married Dolphin man or not. That and the fact that it's generally an old, overdone sentiment that has been done much better in the past. No offense of course: one can't write a love song and expect it to be particularily interesting or original (unless it's about loving Dolphins), and I'd think the same goes for poetry.




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