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10-72 (Free verse) by dragonfly

I'll threaten to shoot him with the gun we hide in the fireplace just to see the look on his face but he knows that I love him He'll threaten to cut off my manhood to make sure that his point is clearly understood but I know he loves me I'll hate him today but love him the next This is the way we've learned to coexist He'll grab me by the wrist and threaten to push me down the stairs But I know, in his own way, he's letting me know he cares

Shuushin 18-Nov-03/8:19 AM
a lovely codependent ditty.

the only nit I can knit is that I'd like to see a better word than just gun, and cut off is screaming to be replaced.

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