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Inane Muttering (Free verse) by Don-Quixote

Your hushed whispers said nothing- it was just your voice and blither that was somehow calming. In those twilight moments, they were a welcomed occurrence- since I wasn't listening. Brushed away my worries unwound the anxiety- letting me drift to whatever dream was forming in my mind then. Thats how you always convinced me everything was fine- and now, without it I'm left submerged, flailing. The worst of it?- waiting. Which ultimately?- changes nothing. But your whispers?- made me press on. Simplicity accomplished alot; things aren't so simple now.

Shuushin 15-Nov-03/12:35 AM
"occurrence" as it is used is a missed opportunity, methinks. Why were they welcome? (sarcasm aside)

Other than that, pretty frickin' solid.

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