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Something I Hope I Would Not Hear Myself Speak (Free verse) by Lifeboatman

The bitches of our time are as plentiful As the flying pigs of antiquity And with as much decency too Though their nest-sties had changed To haystacks, then to cabarets And then to bust seats and pool tables, They still copulate to make extreme their countenances And don their promiscuity without shame

Shuushin 13-Nov-03/8:24 AM
Reads pretty good, actually. Sometimes those wings can give a pre-impression.

Couple crits for you, if you are so inclined.

a comma after "decency" would work well overall, methinks

nest-[sites]? or were you making a play on "nasty"; either way.

"bust seats"? what is that? bus seats? if the "nest-sties" was intentional, then I'd believe this was too.

The last two lines are - perfect.




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