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The Burial (Haiku) by Mona Lisa

Thick Black rain flowed From the windows of her soul As soil hit the rose.

http://mulberryfairy 9-Nov-03/11:11 AM
I liked it all except "windows of her soul", even though "soul" went with Black and soil. Maybe you could work in soul without the cliche.




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