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A heart without keys (Lyric) by sliver

You are mine, Although you may not know it yet. Today, tomorrow, forever. You don't know how good it'll get. We're going somewhere together To enjoy azure seas. The swell of a small boat. The answer to your dreams. Crystal clear skies Honest open eyes, A heart without keys Fulfillment of your needs.

http://mulberryfairy 9-Nov-03/10:59 AM
need an apostrophe in "we're" in stanza 2, line 1. I noticed how the first stanza was telling the "you" of the good to come, like the narrator was rescuing the "you", but then in the second stanza, it was apparent that the narrator, too, planned to get something out of the relationship when you wrote "and you there with me" instead of "and me there with you".
The last stanza seems to be about "you" again, because you say "fulfillment of your needs". This confusion added some depth to a title and subject that was dangerously close to the cliche. I wonder if you meant to do it, and if so, if you could make it more pronounced?




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