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Love (Free verse) by EouSou

Making love to grow a child Starts out by just a kiss When two peoples heart's Grow twice their size And rainbows cloud the sky Two hours of passion 9 months of love And years of tenderness Making all of life a single moment That began with just a kiss

richa 29-Oct-03/12:07 PM
'Making love to grow a child' is a rather interesting line, seems so unsentimental.

Then 'two peoples hearts grow twice the size' is unabashedly OTT romantic.

Two nice lines but somewhat at odds I think.

The bit about life a single moment is a bit trite, what comes before it does not convince.




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