poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Behind My Blue Eyes (rough draft) by Mona Lisa.

god'swife23 Oct 2003

Lovely, needs some tidying up, but that's all. Please please get rid of the qoutation marks at the end. Oh, it's like wearing white platformed sandals with black hose. In fact if you toss that entire last line out, the poem would be the better for it. You've already brought the soul in at the first line of that stanza. Leave it be.