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falling in with the wrong crowd. (Free verse) by richa

The heart does not stop, when we stop listening to its beat, nor thoughts of the travelling man, though a diamond may cut his windscreen with light and for a moment take the pole of his gaze like a magnet.

INTRANSIT 23-Oct-03/6:42 AM
a diamond may cut his windscreen with light. I get the image but is it a diamond or light? I stumble here for some reason. I like it otherwise. Most what you write reaches me, makes me think. Keep it up.




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