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My Angel's Suicide (Free verse) by Artemis745

The light was too bright, So she hid from the sun. In her dark place, She held the gun. Closed her eyes, And held her breath. Gripping the gun, Waiting for death. Placed her finger, In perfect position. The gun, well loaded, With ammunition. Raising the gun, Up to her head She ran from life; Choosing death instead. Pulled the trigger, And fired the shot. Dropping the gun, The barrel still hot And in that split second, Before she died, My angel cried.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 13-Oct-03/5:56 AM
[_] AABB rhyming scheme
[_] About drugs
[X] About romantic love
[_] About writing
[X] About suicide or self-mutilation
[_] About the author's social pastimes
[_] Arbitrary indentation
[X] Arbitrary line breaks
[_] Autobiographical but written in the third person
[_] Clerical errors
[X] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain)
[X] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart)
[_] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched)
[_] Devoid of rhyme
[X] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia)
[_] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia)
[X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery
[_] Ellipses used overabundantly
[_] Insipidly whimsical or zany
[_] Internet shorthand or emoticons
[_] Leaving rant
[_] Lower case only
[_] 'Lyrics'
[X] Melodramatic
[_] Naively religious or superstitious
[_] Obsessed with femininity
[_] Pointedly unanswered questions
[_] Rage against the machine
[X] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea
[_] Sanctimonious
[_] Self-obsessed
[X] Sentimental
[X] Smugly-named protagonist
[_] Thesaurophilia
[_] Untitled
[X] Vicarious wish fulfilment

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