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recede into deceit (Free verse) by skaskowski

she flushes and splashes my thoughts out in flashes in clashes i've sought to forget, i've been wrought on the stable, oblivious table that ruins the room, black and white, mirror yellow.

Shuushin 9-Oct-03/5:40 PM
great start, last two lines: splat.

I keep thinking about a bathroom, then horseshoes - I NEED those last two lines dammit.




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