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Insight (Free verse) by Moniquesuvee

Like a hog that couldn't get slopped Or an engine that somebody dropped A thriving mortician--now deceased Or mounts to a motor that hadn't been greased Why, a toilet that can't even muster a flush Is like a Valentine with no kisses and mush A good intention clouded with the vice of pride Like words standing ready for a poem cast aside

sliver 27-Sep-03/8:03 AM
It sounds good though, I especially like it for the mechanic stuff. With a name like yours you don't seem like you'd be a mechanic. Good poet though.




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