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Life's Work (Free verse) by baughworm

“Many spend their entire lives searching for enlightenment, I like to spend my time Leading others away from it.” I received a quite cumbersome Shovel at birth, With which I was to Begin work on my grave Immediately. As of yet I have not started, For the shovel is rather heavy. Instead I used it to plant a tree, In hopes that some poor sod Will be seduced by its leaves and fruits, flowers and abundant bees To pick up a shovel of his own and Start digging.

hipster flare 26-Sep-03/11:20 AM
feels as though there should be more. The circular pattern of the shovel is almost predicatable--perhaps you could prolong this with a few more stanzas in between.




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