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SupremeDreamer (Free verse) by Nirvana13666

A frigid look An empty bedroom Living inside a dead mind I look out and only see black I am blind to colors that bleed bright The solstice of my life is over Solitude has begun I shiver at the thought of your frigid looks Pain is a remedy for my delusion You aren’t even there anymore Yet your stares turn my blood cold I wish you wanted me I wish you hadn’t forgotten the way I hate I died yesterday Today it’s just my dead body wanting Wanting to feel alive again

horus8 24-Sep-03/12:17 PM
because, I mean, it's hard to have a lot of readers with poetry as crap as what you wrote above. That's very unprofessional of you? Would you like me to do an edit for you? Add some words a little bigger than "frigid" and "shiver" or say more poignant than "forgotten"? lol. When you say "a lot of readers" do you mean like a sixth grade classroom in the special ed dept. And, also, how in the fuck do you pronounce "NNirvana" Sort of drawn out at the beginning? like ENNNNNNNNNNN-ir-van-aaaaa?




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