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One Moment to the Other (v3) (Free verse) by nentwined

one moment to the other goes by way of circumstance; one moment from the other flows in slow inertial dance. one moment to the other, slight, is where we spend our worry-- 'tis but a brief and fancied flight that causes us our hurry. one moment to the other, long, is hardly there in memory: where once a moment boasted strong time scours clean as emery one moment and another pass, to and fro through consciousness, in spans too short or long to grasp... one moment here, one moment less.

INTRANSIT 23-Sep-03/7:19 AM
I'm not keen on emery for some reason. I suspect the stanza would need to be revised to correct and I know what a pain that can be. otherwise, this flows much better.




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