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I am one (Other) by red

Morning sun you pull me from the place where, i am one. You take me in, the form I came and i fall back, just like the rain.

EAger to Offend 20-Sep-03/12:46 PM
Much better than the rose one. I'd take out the line spacings and all of the commas. It seems to me that the places you put commas should have been line-breaks.




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