Poemranker [Replying] Mon May 13 02:07:08 PDT 2024

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I despise you. You took my heart, And ripped it in to shreds. Until there was nothing left. I detest you. You stabbed my chest Until my blood flowed out Into a puddle of crimson Beneath my aching figure. Until there was a hole Of emptiness within My abused body, Helpless and hopeless, Cold and dead. You had offered me warmth, But I was so na??ve. I believed you. I wanted you. I did not anticipate All this pain All this hurt. You went away With hardly a farewell. How dare you go And leave me all alone? I am so lonely, I need someone. I hate you, I hate you. You hurt me the most When you didn???t mean to. I hate you, I hate you. You left my life forever, With barely a farewell. I hate you, I hate you. I hate you because I love you.

-=SeTTle=-

29-Jul-02/9:15 PM

A LIGHTNING STORM?? DA are you MARTIN LUTHER or SOMETHING?? Now RAVEN, I would like to make it very clear that I DO NOT WANT YOUR "PUNANI". Don't worry about that. Nobody wants it, even if you gave it away. Now I personally think this poem is mediocre. It is certainly not deserving of 10s, but that's opinion. I was reading some Dylan Thomas last night, and I'd be a damn fool not to tell you to do the same. The major fault of this poem and all of its ilk is that it is meaningless by virtue of its medium. TCP/IP has a tendency to destroy any significance to the words you're saying. TCP/IP, even in the ARPANET days made it painfully clear how much utter bullshit floats above us like those plant islands on venus in that episode of cowboy bebop. So in short, I suggest you TOSS OUT THE DEAD CAN DANCE CDs, START LISTENING TO JOY DIVISION AND GET SOME LIKEMINDED PEOPLE TOGETHER WITH SOME WHISKEY AND WRITE ABOUT THAT. Remember, WRITE what you KNOW, but do not SUBMIT IT if it IS UTTERLY LACKING IN CRAFT OR NOVELTY or ANYTHING ELSE WHICH I'D CARE TO READ. If you need some help I'm sure DA would be happy to critique your work before you hit submit.

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