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reflexion v.3 - Cannibalization and Twilight (Free verse) by Don-Quixote

-- You are dreamwalker, sauntering across the rouged rocks where silence lay. Frolic beneath the flowing bloodstream, imbibe this prized Medoc and revel whats left of your sacrifice, splattered upon natures platter. Feed off another, to live again, and awaken to your drollery and film noir; left to live this consummate nightmare.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 19-Sep-03/4:29 PM
[_] AABB rhyming scheme
[_] About romantic love
[_] About poetry-writing
[_] About suicide or self-mutilation
[X] Arbitrary indentation
[X] Arbitrary line breaks
[_] Autobiographical but in the third person
[X] Clerical errors
[_] Cliched imagery (staring out of window, pits of despair)
[_] Cliched rhymes (love/above etc.)
[_] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments
[X] Devoid of rhyme
[_] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices
[_] Devoid of wond'rous or fantastical imagery
[_] Drug references
[_] Elves, unicorns, etc.
[_] Exclamation points used to mark 'the funny bits'
[_] Insipidly whimsical or zany
[_] Leaving rant
[_] Lower case only
[_] Melodramatic
[_] Naively religious or superstitious
[_] Obsessed with femininity
[_] Overabundance of ellipses
[_] Overuse of 'depression' words (putrid, wretched, darkness, etc)
[X] Pointedly unanswered questions
[_] Protagonist has a smug name
[_] Rage against the machine
[_] References to the author's 'social life'
[_] Repetition of a single word or phrase to the point of nausea
[_] Sanctimoniously moral
[_] Sentimental
[_] Self-pity
[X] Thesaurophilia
[_] Use of internet shorthand or emoticons
[_] Vicarious wish fulfilment




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