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Boys with Guns (Free verse) by Hostileintent

Have you ever seen a picture A picture taken of a child A child with a gun, who has never seen the fun The fun that the gun deprived Have you ever seen a picture A picture taken for To show the Grotesque Obscenity The Obscenity Grotesque, the Grotesque Obscenity of war Who ever heard of the boy soldier Those essential elements of war Disgusting, Disgusting. I’m Disgusted. Disgusting The Grotesque Obscenity of war Have you ever seen a picture Of a boy, without a home A picture, a boy, no home- a war The Grotesque Obscenity of war

Don-Quixote 19-Sep-03/7:36 AM
I have heard of, and have seen such a picture.. not pleasant.

the repetition makes it seem like your starting to stammer, as if gripped by anxiety or nervouseness.. at first i thought it out of place, but then you mentioned that you lived in such a place, and it made sense..

was that the purpose? or was it simply done to give more force to emotion? (im all curiouse this morning)

overall, 8




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