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Extra Strength Tylenol (Free verse) by DurtKL

Acetaminophen, The active ingredient in Extra Strength Tylenol, Is a pain reliever. Uses are listed as Temporary relief for Minor aches and pains Resulting from Headaches, arthritis, Toothaches, the common cold, Menstrual cramps, and etcetera. Her symptoms a broken heart, overflowing tears, And heavy breathing. Yet, None of these were Listed on the label. So, I wondered why She downed the whole bottle.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 18-Sep-03/10:11 PM
[_] AABBCC rhyming scheme
[X] About romantic love
[_] Arbitrary indentation
[X] Arbitrary line breaks
[_] Autobiographical but in the third person
[_] Braggadocious
[_] Clerical errors
[_] Cliched rhymes (love/above etc.)
[_] Cliched adolescent metaphors of darkness for despair etc.
[X] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments
[X] Devoid of rhyme
[X] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices
[X] Devoid of wond'rous or fantastical imagery
[X] Drug references
[_] Elves
[_] Exclamation points used to mark 'the funny bits'
[_] Insipidly whimsical or zany
[_] Leaving rant
[_] Lower case only
[_] 'Lyrics'
[X] Melodramatic
[_] Naively religious or superstitious
[_] Obsessed with femininity
[_] Overabundance of ellipses
[_] Overuse of Latinate words and/or convoluted sentence structures
[X] Pointedly unanswered questions
[_] Protagonist has a smug name
[_] Rage against the machine
[_] References to the author's 'social life'
[_] Repetition of a single word or phrase to the point of nausea
[_] Sanctimoniously moral
[X] Sappy
[X] Suicide-related
[_] Wish fulfilment

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