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I Hate You (Free verse) by mytenderrage

I despise you. You took my heart, And ripped it in to shreds. Until there was nothing left. I detest you. You stabbed my chest Until my blood flowed out Into a puddle of crimson Beneath my aching figure. Until there was a hole Of emptiness within My abused body, Helpless and hopeless, Cold and dead. You had offered me warmth, But I was so na??ve. I believed you. I wanted you. I did not anticipate All this pain All this hurt. You went away With hardly a farewell. How dare you go And leave me all alone? I am so lonely, I need someone. I hate you, I hate you. You hurt me the most When you didn???t mean to. I hate you, I hate you. You left my life forever, With barely a farewell. I hate you, I hate you. I hate you because I love you.

razorgrin 29-Jul-02/4:33 PM
i think what DA is saying is that you can't write worth shit, which is true. not only is the poem a collection of hackneyed angst, but it's badly written. as for your "feelings" argument, i'm sure you think that your emotions are valid (awww...you think you matter!)the fact remains that we don't care that someone dumped your whiny ass and you're bitching and moaning about it.




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