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Can you comment and vote? (Free verse) by LuckyJoe

Is it to hard too comprehend, Or is it laziness of which you depend, Come one come all… You’ve read so now vote. A zero is quite fine, Its something to call mine! If you’re looking within my mind, Give a little back with a comment. A ten is just trash, If not accompanied by a remark, Is what I ask, too much for you to comprehend?

nentwined 16-Sep-03/7:05 AM
"to" hard? perhaps.

"of which you depend"? ew.

"one" and "come" should be split by a comma.

the flow is rocky. to a point? I see the one point, but the poem's got bits sticking out every which way, detracting (I think) from the spearhead.

but a cute idea.




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