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The Last Stop (Free verse) by Quiet-Ralph

While waiting at the last stop I contemplate the decisions of my life How have I made a difference With every raising of the sun A new ray of hope was given Time to complete my task Gain a greater knowledge As I set and look on my past Nothing has changed, I'm still getting on and off at the last stop

nentwined 15-Sep-03/2:13 PM
a quaint viewpoint, but could be more powerfully presented. maybe if you gave examples of how you did nothing? also (for my taste) could use a bit more flow... or punctuation... or something. reads choppily.




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