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Broken Child (Free verse) by Artemis745

I am but a broken child Swimming through a sea of great minds. A child playing an adults game But still I plan to succeed. For here there are no rules This is my hidden world On the edge of insanity Where all can enter But some may never leave This is my edge of disaster On a cliff of despair Over looking all the Broken bodies of Ghost and days gone by...

nentwined 15-Sep-03/6:44 AM
I need more to see if you're saying something interesting. Some work on the flow of it would make people more willing to listen to whatever message you have.




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