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Alone (Free verse) by Artemis745

My wish and my folly Secretly my desire The hopes and dreams Swirling 'round your deity being My worthiness intangible My devoutness unsacred A love forever unspoken Eternally flaming Flawfully you exist within me Perfectly settled in your niche Circles of cloven wings flutter by A faceless entity living within your mist Your life and infinity Mean all the same to me A pointlessly meaningful death Entraps me in it's lair And you walk by unheedingly.

nentwined 15-Sep-03/6:41 AM
I think the "big words" are trying too hard for something that's been said too much. Though "cloven wings" has me curious. ?




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