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Insight (Free verse) by Moniquesuvee

Like a hog that couldn't get slopped Or an engine that somebody dropped A thriving mortician--now deceased Or mounts to a motor that hadn't been greased Why, a toilet that can't even muster a flush Is like a Valentine with no kisses and mush A good intention clouded with the vice of pride Like words standing ready for a poem cast aside

richa 9-Sep-03/9:06 AM
Last two couplets are too 'mushy'. The first two are rather good. I like the semi-surreal quality




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