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Something Lost, Something Gained (Lyric) by Irischer Junge

You used to mean The world to me. You used to be Who I always wanted to see. We only had Shared one kiss, And now we have Moved on from this. Now I truly realize How much I really had, But all I can say Is that's too bad. We've still got each other As friends in Christ. He's given us The gift of eternal life.

sliver 8-Sep-03/7:42 PM
I have to agree with nentwined, before you post a poem, read it aloud to yourself. You will find that the flow doesn't exist. Just read it to yourself and try again.




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