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none (Free verse) by tadpole

I am proud I congradulate my sorry self inside No one knows My persona displays humility of mind I detest it Ever endeavoring to be rid of it I am aware True confidence I crave The source of which I found is actually near I'm not so bad I think to myself in silence I am wrong Left alone my nature's capable of every kind of violence

J.B. Manning 8-Sep-03/4:48 PM
Tad, I think this has a LOT of potential. I'm no expert, but I know a good piece when I see one. I think if you worked on it, lengthen it, focused your energy like a fine tuned lazar, baby, you've had a nice red hot spot in the middle of the board.






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