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Trust (Free verse) by hobojo

We slipped into sadness We both spiraled down We were in over our heads We both nearly drown I tried hard to climb out For so long I have grown And now look down with sadness To see you alone You reach for my hand Expecting my love "I am so sorry" I say as I look from above I tried to work with you I tried to assist Why didn't you let me Why did you resist

Mr Pig 8-Sep-03/1:24 PM
S1 is mixed up in the past and present tense and suggests the allegiance is to the rhyme rather than the point.

tryed is tried.

You're a good writer but this is not exemplary of your talent.




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