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Why Stay?
(
Free verse
) by
LuckyJoe
Entombed in an icy grave, Through the frozen crystal, Looking up into the void sky, Breath shallow wishing to die, Encased emotion due to devotion, Worry no longer of her pain, It is her who drives you insane.
LuckyJoe
5-Sep-03/8:03 AM
Indeed it was. Not sure what I was thinking. I'm reading it all over now... and see many reasons not to end it like that. Why is there still a door jam to go under if the walls have fallen down. If someone is caged, chained, in a prison of some sort why is there a door jam near them.
Thanks for pointing that out..made me look at it and see what was wrong.
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