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The empty room (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

I was invited to heaven and saw Jesus there. He held his face in his hands, he was sobbing. Gray and matted was his hair. I said: "Jesus? What is wrong?" He said: "I don't know, nobody stays." And then he sent me away.

SupremeDreamer 3-Sep-03/5:40 AM
short and simple. i also think the inversion suggestion should be utilized.

though, im not sure about the message.. my first thought is:

"god does not forgive. he is also sadistic, and left jesus in heaven alone."

anyway, heres a 7.




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