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Why Stay? (Free verse) by LuckyJoe

Entombed in an icy grave, Through the frozen crystal, Looking up into the void sky, Breath shallow wishing to die, Encased emotion due to devotion, Worry no longer of her pain, It is her who drives you insane.

Nicholas Jones 1-Sep-03/5:51 AM
Interesting. Are the numerous grammatical errors an attempt at capturing the mindset of an inarticulate character, or can you just not type properly. I like the rousing ending.




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