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Why Stay? (Free verse) by LuckyJoe

Entombed in an icy grave, Through the frozen crystal, Looking up into the void sky, Breath shallow wishing to die, Encased emotion due to devotion, Worry no longer of her pain, It is her who drives you insane.

Sent away by mommy 31-Aug-03/2:10 PM
so I remain stuck here with you is better than "so stuck here with you I remain." even if it doesn't make a rhyme.

But don't listen to me, I'm a hack..or less.




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