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Friends Forever (Free verse) by x311

Silver tongued demon Speaking smoothly in my ear Telling me what I want to hear While you tear me apart from the inside You know me so well Been with me for quite a while Flashing your white-toothed smile But the whole time, you've lied Weakening my defenses You are ripping down my wall As I heed your every beck and call You've used me as my heart has cried Making me feel comfortable You use my weaknesses against me Almost ready to unleash your fury Pandora's Box, now untied The time has come I finally give in to your demands Unimaginable things now done by my hands Dark thoughts wash in with the tide Entirely consumed I don't care about anything Because of this serpent's sting Nothing left but an empty shell, completely fried.

x311 27-Jul-02/7:56 AM
thanks for commmenting horus8. i enjoy getting feedback, but could you please explain yours? I guess I just don't understand. Thanks.




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