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A Surgeons Butchery (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

Withered bones rattle while an old woman watches blood slowly seep from her lovers stomach. Her eyes follow the movement of the switchblade, watching her lovers life fade as the mad surgeon slices lesions all over soft flesh. Pupils go wide, terror stiffens her entire body, while the surgeon closes his black bag and departs, leaving the screen door swinging, echoing the shrill screams bidding him farewell.

Nirvana13666 22-Aug-03/7:47 AM
Nice wording but it is like telling a story, nothing really poetic about it maybe that was your intention.
I have seen better from you so since I know what you are capable of I'll give a 4.




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