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love is true
(
Free verse
) by
-=??lilaznjen??=-
love is true love is not hate let's all agree that we'll all find a mate.
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
26-Jul-02/2:19 PM
Line 1: 'Love' is neither true nor false. It is not a propostition. Line 2: This doesn't tell us anything we don't already know. Its sole purpose is to rhyme with Line 4. This makes the poeme seem forced. Lines 3&4: These make people say 'cute' or 'witty'. I could understand this if they were so hilarious that they made up for the rest of the piece. Unfortunately they fail. You fail.
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