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Some die waiting, or laugh forgetting (Villanelle) by Shardik

Take good care of yourself when I'm gone Yes, I know you wished us forever Better out with love than in with none I'll keep this dusk, and leave you a dawn Cause, if I don't depart now, I may never Take good care of yourself when I'm gone Stay a red queen as I play the blue pawn When jealous pride was forged to sever Better out with love than in with none Looking back, I see you leave a light on Six years passed by, and so did my fever You took such care, you forgot I was gone Your poppy itch nods & your stay lover yawn Adapted faster than memories should ever, But better out with love than in with none If getting on with life's a race, you've won I see your favourite word's still "whatever" So take good care of yourself when I'm gone I'm better outside your love than inside with none.

J.B. Manning 20-Aug-03/1:29 PM
I like this one. The point is clear, the rthym fluid, and your personality shows through. Smart.




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