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missing time (revised) (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

I awake with premonition. panicked hand skids for paperscrap to record the last moments of this dream of missing time. my bare wrist crossed with hers faded blanket bunched arm jackknifed round the front pale fingers placed like the careful arrangement of a Japanese print as she breathes through chapped lips so perfect. tender lids darkened, in sleep. you seem new. I want to touch with one finger the soft swell under your chin when you've lost all rigidity no more angles of attack with your ear to the pillow. cold wind from the window streams down the wall and in the madness of morning someone's cat jabs her black paws through a gap in the door. can I peel away day to lay bare the clutched core? there's no time there's no time. you're driving home today. I blink twice and you're gone. in my head like a song.

INTRANSIT 17-Aug-03/4:58 PM
I like the randomly shifted lines better. Dropping the buttercup works! I don't know what perfect is, but I can't imagine it being better than this. you piss me off.




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