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drought on talkin river (Free verse) by richa

the tributaries had lost their momentum since swell, and the run off had faded to no more than the shallow beat of a pebble, relentless as the beam of a lighthouse, the sun sifted salt from the wide mouth of the river, in hours held back by the treeless scoured landscape, meanderless and slow, which let the light through from the far fetch of warm europe; like the word of a gospel.

<~> 14-Aug-03/6:45 PM
much much more than youusually give us! smart.

2 quibbles:

1. tarns have mouths? since when? rivers do--not lakes.
2. comma at the end of L5, since the phrase's purpose is to modify.

nice work.

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