Caducus14 Aug 2003

from here is fine:
The megre,insignificant and wretched,
...Our foolish...-
are foolhardy puissant individuals,
And precarious fob eachother off as,
Whose persona is not pellucid,
Forget their ignorance-through the leviathan,
So is it best,not to be the best,
The distinctive,innate and innocuous,
But just.....Ordinary

But prior to it reads like a different poem altogether, its different in style and is drowned to overkill by rhyme. Easy on the word void, there is rescind which is another defintion of the word.

I like the end which i pasted above but it reads more like a collaboration due to the difference in styles. another 7.

Your always welcome on my feedback.