poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on The invisible man by Hostileintent.

Mr Pig13 Aug 2003

reminds me of a Neil Young song and yes, you get the point across of how we're just a number, metric and disposable.

Lose the brackets you don't need them, leave that for the reader to decide. 7

Too much use of the word shit in stanza 3, otherwise its a grilled goose.