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On Youth Revisited (Free verse) by vulcan

A breeze comes and goes festively, I wash my face And water, splash! My new face is like a rainbow After a grim shower. Now, methinks I'm younger than before... Behind me is a Door That opens I know Into a chaos Of Nightingales and flow'rs.

http://mulberryfairy 10-Aug-03/7:12 AM
Saying "grim shower" right after you were washing your face made me think you were talking about a (bathing) shower, rather than a rainstorm.




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