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Looking down (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

Invisible panther paws trepidate on taut capillary threads spanning cloisonne tiled chasms that crack, break, heave inviting black cats to fall to suggestion in burning oranges, and join in the ashing of others

poetandknowit 8-Aug-03/10:26 PM
Rather vague. And the "that" alone on a line has got to go. I see where you might be going with it, but you might try and clear it up a bit.




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