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Looking down (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

Invisible panther paws trepidate on taut capillary threads spanning cloisonne tiled chasms that crack, break, heave inviting black cats to fall to suggestion in burning oranges, and join in the ashing of others

INTRANSIT 8-Aug-03/4:16 PM
The only thing I changed was (cloisonne). To make the chasm prettier, more attractive to fall into.But still it's lacking alot. Maybe after the weekend I'll tear into it and do a ground-up workover.




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