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Looking down (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

Invisible panther paws trepidate on taut capillary threads spanning cloisonne tiled chasms that crack, break, heave inviting black cats to fall to suggestion in burning oranges, and join in the ashing of others

EAger to Offend 8-Aug-03/10:06 AM
Alright! Those last three lines are still perfect ,then. Somehow "to suggestion" doesn't quite seem to lead me there, though. I'm convinced that this is where the communication breakdown is.





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