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Yellow Cake for Everyone (Free verse) by Retaliate

Baby's got cake for breakfast Baby's got water from a drum Baby's got radiation sickness Because the army doesn't care about uranium Looter's got a barrel full of cake Looter's gonna make himself some dough Looter's gonna make himself connections And then just sit back and watch the show W knew exactly where the cake was W knew the looters would know too If W really cared about uranium Don't you think he'd guard the yellow cake we knew?

http://mulberryfairy 7-Aug-03/6:11 PM
"W knew where exactly where the cake was"- You have an extra "where" in there. I like the idea, but you know the army is getting sick from depleted uranium, too, so I think "army doesn't care about uranium" is a little harsh, since most of the army is made up of normal, working class people, not the people who make decisions about uranium.




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