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Angel (Free verse) by abecedarian

a completely dark infinity interrupted by a brilliant light an angel with a face so pure and beautiful that I could not see it white glowing skin and thin fragile limbs impossibly strong as she grabbed my hand and I followed The darkness sensed a gap the place where her glowing legs could not meet and prevent the darkness from entering and violating in fear she whirled to face me wings streaming a circle behind her and pulled me close so that I could keep the darkness out

http://mulberryfairy 6-Aug-03/5:12 PM
What couldn't you see, the angel or the angel's face? "It" doesn't really work there, even if you are trying to keep the angel's gender a secret.
I thought that was a pretty cool way to say that you did her, the "dark" violating her, and you protecting her.




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